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3 Write a story about a holiday adventure for a school newspaper. Use the plan below and the text in Ex. 1a as a model.
Plan
Title: Never Alone...
Introduction (Paragraph 1) • time • place • people in story
Main Body (Paragraphs 2 & 3) • the events one after the other
Conclusion (Paragraph 4) • what happened in the end • how the people felt
Готовый вариант (по плану из упр. 3)
The Dog That Saved Us
Introduction (time, place, people) Last July I spent two weeks at my grandmother's house, in a small village near the forest. My cousin Alex was there too, and our grandma looked after us.
Main body (events one after another) One morning we went to the forest to pick mushrooms. We took a basket and walked along a narrow path. Soon we found some mushrooms, then some more, and we did not notice how deep we had gone. Suddenly it got dark and it started to rain.
We tried to find the way back, but every tree looked the same. I was scared, and Alex was too. Then a big brown dog ran up to us, wagged its tail and walked away. We followed it and ten minutes later we saw the village houses.
Conclusion (what happened in the end, feelings) Grandma was waiting at the gate, and she hugged us. We were wet and tired, but safe and happy. Now we always take a phone into the forest.
Как устроен ответ
| Абзац | Что должно быть | В сочинении |
|---|---|---|
| 1 | время, место, герои | Last July; grandma's village near the forest; I, cousin Alex, grandma |
| 2–3 | события по порядку | пошли за грибами → заблудились → дождь → собака → вывела к деревне |
| 4 | чем всё кончилось + чувства | бабушка у калитки; wet, tired, but safe and happy |
Что делает текст «историей», а не списком:
- Past Simple для действий: went, found, noticed, ran, followed, hugged;
- слова-связки по цепочке: One morning → Soon → Suddenly → Then → After that → In the end;
- одно «фоновое» описание через Past Continuous: we were walking along a path when it started to rain;
- чувства словами, а не просто «было страшно»: scared, worried, tired, happy, relieved.
Проверка: в тексте 4 абзаца ровно по плану, все глаголы-действия в Past Simple, есть время, место, герои и финал с эмоциями — задание выполнено.
Обсуждение
4 сообщенияМы гуляем в копылах до 10 с сестрой
Готовый вариант с твоими деталями
Summer at My Grandma's
Last July I spent two weeks at my grandmother's house in Kopyl. My sister was there too, and we had a great time together.
Every evening we walked around Kopyl with my sister. We usually went out after dinner and came back home at ten o'clock. We looked at the shop windows, met our friends and talked about everything. When it got dark, the street lights came on, and the town looked very beautiful.
In the daytime we helped our grandma in the garden. On rainy days we stayed at home, played board games and watched films.
Those two weeks were short, but I will never forget them. I felt happy and free, and now I am waiting for next summer.
Что я взял из твоего сообщения:
- в Копылах → in Kopyl (название места заглавной буквой, без предлога «в»);
- гуляем с сестрой → we walked around Kopyl with my sister (с сестрой — это with, а не and);
- до 10 → came back home at ten o'clock — по-английски «до 10» в расписании прогулок естественнее звучит как «возвращались в десять», иначе читается как «гуляли десять часов».
Проверка: 4 абзаца по плану (место и герои → прогулки → занятия днём → финал и чувства), все действия в Past Simple, детали из твоего сообщения на месте.
Если сочинение нужно по-русски или название места пишется иначе — скажи, поправлю.
Мы гуляем с двродной сестрой в деревне Копылы
Готовый вариант (с уточнениями)
Summer at My Grandma's
Last July I spent two weeks at my grandmother's house in the village of Kopyl. My cousin Ann was there too, and we had a great time together.
Every evening my cousin and I walked around the village. We usually went out after dinner and came back home at ten o'clock. We met our friends, talked about everything and watched the sunset over the fields. When it got dark, the street lights came on, and the village looked very beautiful.
In the daytime we helped our grandma in the garden and carried water from the well. On rainy days we stayed at home, played board games and watched films.
Those two weeks were short, but I will never forget them. I felt happy and free, and now I am waiting for next summer.
Что я поправил по твоему сообщению
| Твоя фраза | В сочинении | Почему |
|---|---|---|
| с двоюродной сестрой | with my cousin Ann | «двоюродная сестра» — это cousin; отдельного слова «cousin sister» нет, а имя делает текст живее |
| в деревне Копылы | in the village of Kopyl | village (деревня), а не town; «Копылы» → Kopyl, с заглавной буквы |
| гуляем | we walked / went out | сочинение о прошлом лете — Past Simple |
Проверка: 4 абзаца по плану, все действия в Past Simple, детали на месте (двоюродная сестра, деревня Копылы, прогулки до десяти).
Если сестру зовут иначе — назови имя, вставлю.
