1 Read the letter. Do you think it is well written? Why?/Why not? Dear (1) Whatever- your - name- is, (2) I'm writing about your (3) advert for pieces of land on the Moon, which I…
1 Read the letter. Do you think it is well written? Why?/Why not? Dear (1) Whatever- your - name- is, (2) I'm writing about your (3) advert for pieces of land on the Moon, which I saw in 'Planet Monthly' last Tuesday. (4) I'm thinking of buying one. (5) But I (6) want some more information first. (7) Tell me how much they cost. (8) Also, (9) I want you to send me further information (10) about transportation to the Moon. (11) Can you also let me know (12) if I'll be able to build a swimming pool on the land? (13) Please write back! (14) Lots of love, (15) Annabel 2 Match a word or phrase in bold in the letter with a more formal word or phrase below. a However, b would like c Secondly, dIam writing with regard to e I look forward to hearing from you. f I would be grateful if you could tell me g whether I will h Sir/Madam, i regarding j Yours faithfully, k Iam interested in 1 Could you m Annabel Davis n advertisement • I wonder if you could
- The letter is not very well written for a couple of reasons:
Tone: The letter uses an informal tone, as indicated by phrases like "Lots of love," which is inappropriate for a business inquiry. A more suitable closing would be more formal, especially since the topic is about purchasing property.
Clarity and Structure: While the letter does convey the request for information about "pieces of land on the Moon," it could be organized more clearly, potentially with numbered or bullet points for each question or request for information.
Specificity: Some requests could be more specific (e.g., "Tell me how much they cost" could specify the type of land or size of the plot).
Overall, the letter is too informal and lacks a more structured approach suitable for a business correspondence.
- Here are matches for the more formal equivalents of the bolded phrases in the letter:
a. However - (12) I wonder if you could
b. would like - (6) I want some more information first
c. Secondly - (10) Can you also let me know
d. I am writing with regard to - (2) I'm writing about
e. I look forward to hearing from you. - (13) Please write back!
f. I would be grateful if you could tell me - (7) Tell me how much they cost.
g. whether I will - (11) if I'll be able to
h. Sir/Madam - (1) Whatever- your - name- is
i. regarding - (3) advert
j. Yours faithfully - (14) Lots of love
k. I am interested in - (4) I'm thinking of buying one.
l. Could you - (9) I want you to send me further information
m. Annabel Davis - (15) Annabel
Note: Some of the phrases may not have direct matches, but this provides a good overview of potential formal alternatives.
